Zynx wrote:This person is fetid beyond recognition
This person is becoming part of the dirt
This person is part of the forest
Apologies, but I have to object to these three. The problem with the first one is that fetid doesn't really make sense in the context. The only way I can imagine someone being so fetid you'd not recognise them is if they raised such a scent that you couldn't bear to get near. Otherwise, smell doesn't usually make someone unrecognisable.
Regarding the second two, they're too specific and couldn't be used with fallens in all locales. If someone was fallen in the Abyss and becoming part of the forest, I'd be more than a little confused.
On a more constructive note, some suggestions for messages:
This body is disfigured beyond recognition.
This body is unidentifiable.
This body shows few signs of life.
This body is approaching death.
This body is bound to earth by spirit alone.
For dark berry poisoning (good idea, Zynx):
This body is unresponsive.




